By the same token, I want to caution that too much originality can veer into the experimental. Some of the more memorable essays that I’ve read were memorable for reasons that were likely not intended. After all, the reasons we use sentences and paragraphs are because they are tools and conventions to improve readability. Sometimes, disrupting these conventions may be distracting and too jarring for the message to be conveyed to the reader.
4. Aspiration: Tying Past to Future
Aspiration is the element that links the applicant’s past experiences with their future goals, the “So what?” of the entire application. A strong essay will not only describe what someone has done before, but tie those experiences to what they hope to achieve during their fellowship years and beyond. This forward-looking perspective gives the essay a sense of direction and purpose.
Why rheumatology? And why now? Even more important, where does the applicant see themself going? These are critical questions I often ask myself as I read the personal statements. As I’ve already mentioned, the essay should help the reader understand the applicant’s background, but without setting the stage for future contributions in the field, it ends up feeling a little empty. Aspiration is about bridging the gap between where the applicant has been and where they are headed. A good essay leads the reader to see a potential trajectory.
In fact, essays without a clear sense of where the applicant is going come across as wistful and nostalgic without a sense of excitement. By emphasizing what they hope to achieve—whether it’s advancing research, improving patient outcomes or advocating for better healthcare policies—applicants can leave a lasting impression of their long-term commitment to rheumatology.
Aspiration also gives readers confidence that the applicant is driven by a genuine sense of purpose, not just by career advancement or prestige. We want to know the future of our field is in good hands, and an essay that articulates a clear, ambitious vision helps us believe that it is.
5. Positivity: Focus on Strengths & Opportunities
Finally, an effective essay should radiate positivity. This doesn’t mean ignoring challenges or glossing over difficulties, but it does mean framing those challenges in a way that highlights resilience, growth, and the opportunities that lie ahead. An essay that is defensive or overly focused on weaknesses can come across as insecure, while one that is positive emphasizes the applicant’s readiness to take on the next step in their career.
